Kismet Arts Tangent

I submitted this for critique today. I explained that I decided to combine the elements of the automotive industry and Zebra into the concept of car tourism, the vertical lines acting as tree silhouettes and zebra stripes. The consensus was that I should lose the tire-shapes, offset the vehicle outline to create movement, change the outline to a more realistic and theme-related car model, and a classmate pointed out that the shapes by the ear had more interest; it looked like a road going between two mountains. So I went home and (on powerpoint, because I am not fluent in much else) I designed this (quick prototype), which I consider a huge improvement: